Thursday, April 29, 2010

The Dominant by tara sue me

Title: The Dominant

Author: tara sue me

Link: http://www.twilighted.net/viewstory.php?sid=10465

Summary: Because every story has two sides - The Submissive from EPOV. Rated M for Adult Themes and D/s. Will make more sense if you read The Submissive first.

Rating: MA (M version available on ff.net: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4918631/1/The_Dominant)

Readability/Grammar – 9
Humor – 2
Fluffiness/Angst – 9
Fur-friendly (Jake love scale) – n/a
Emo-sensitive (Edward love scale) – 10
Smut – 10

Is this story complete? Yes

Did the reviewer finish reading the story? Yes

No need for spoilers here—everything you need to know is in the summary. If you’ve read The Submissive, then you know what’s going to happen, it just gives you a lot more love for Edward, since you’re now inside his mind.

No need to worry about Jake, unless you want to see him as human. Here, Jake is a rescued Siberian Husky, which would totally bother me if it were the other way around, and Edward were portrayed as a Jack Russell Terrier, I’d be really upset, so I guess I’m working off of a double-standard. Oh well. Hahaha.

Tuesday, April 27, 2010

Master of the Universe by Snowqueens Icedragon

Title: Master of the Universe

Author: Snowqueens Icedragon

Link: http://www.twilighted.net/viewstory.php?sid=8511

Summary: Bella Swan is drafted in to interview the reclusive, enigmatic Edward Cullen, multi-millionaire CEO of his company. It's an encounter that will change her life irrevocably, leading her to the darkest realms of desire. Adult themes, AH AU, Bella and Edward.

Rating: MA (M version available on ff.net: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5368782/1/Master_of_the_Universe)

Readability/Grammar – 9
Humor – 5
Fluffiness/Angst – 9
Fur-friendly (Jake love scale) – 5
Emo-sensitive (Edward love scale) – 10
Smut – 10

Is this story complete? No

Did the reviewer finish reading the story? Yes (Up to ch. 82, latest update)

*major spoilers follow*

Woah.

Totally not what I was expecting. Truly, I was expecting something along the lines of The Submissive and The Dominant (I haven’t finished The Dominant yet), but it’s not even close.

A brief glimpse into my ratings:

-The grammar and readability in this fic isn’t perfect, but it’s not as distracting once you get into the story. I have a very specific way of writing, myself, so I’m slightly biased when it comes to technique and how that plays into readability.

-This story is not comedic, in any form of the word, but I found myself cracking up a certain lines, or how Bella and Edward interact, either with themselves, or with others (that comment should make sense if you read it).

-This story has a tiny bit of the fluffy in it, but it's primarily angst. It's strange, because when I actually went to go rate this section, I was thinking, Wow, it really is ALL angst, isn't it? I think the difference here, is that even when times are stressful, it's hopeful. I never once got the feeling (well, with 82 chapters already written, I guess I didn't have much to worry about) that issues were going to be left as they were. Something that helps is that, from the very beginning, Edward is relatively open about how much he wants Bella, and because it's entirely from Bella's perspective, you know how much she is helpless against her desire for him.

-As far as Jake fans are concerned, Jake is mildly irritating. Like in a lot of other fics where he’s a hindrance to Edward and Bella’s relationship, he’s a good guy, just misguided. In the beginning of the fic he and Bella are both drunk and he tries to kiss her. Bella has already drunk dialed Edward moments before this, who flips out and is already on his way, just in time to get rid of Jake (*whew* No involuntary kisses here! Of course not!). Jake is a photographer who we see, when his gallery opens one night, has been taking candid of Bella shots (not distasteful, just unexpected), that are blown up to gigantic proportions. It’s obvious that he’s in love with her. Bella has told him multiple times—and it’s getting annoying—that she’s with Edward, it’s serious, and she’s not interested in him as more than a friend. Still, she’d rather ignore the fact that he’s dense and letting her lead him on, than cut him off because of it.

-Edward is always the protagonist here. Even when he's being a total DID/psycho/control freak/crazy person, you know it's only because it's completely smitten with Bella, and can't imagine his life without her in it. This is an issue that's raised later, so no worries. Bella doesn't take it lying down (haha, pun TOTALLY intended), and makes the point that she understands his love for her, but doesn't give him the right to put her in a guilded cage.

-Smut. *sigh.* Well, as you can most likely guess from the title, the content centers around the BDSM lifestyle. That being said, there are actually minimal scenes where this lifestyle is acted upon. Anyone who has serious issues with that can go for the edited version available on ff.net.

All of this being said, I am really enjoying this fic and the way the characters are developing.

And now, my anticlimactic sign-off.

Laters, Baby!

Sunday, April 25, 2010

The Family Business by SuzsPetals

Title: The Family Business

Author: SuzsPetals

Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5722140/1/The_Family_Business

Summary: Edward Cullen met the girl of his dreams but pushed her away due to his complicated, dangerous family life. When cruel irony reunites them, he’s forced to make a devastating choice: Save her from a fate worse than death or from the family business. AU

Rating: M

Readability - 10
Grammar - 10
Humor - 5
Fluffiness/Angst - 5
Fur-friendly (Jake love scale) – N/A so far
Emo-sensitive (Edward love scale) – 10
Smut – N/A so far
Sensuality - 3

Is this story complete? Yes

Did the reviewer finish reading the story? Up to the latest update (chapter 12 at time of review)

*Spoilers follow*

Jake is mentioned and has a brief phone conversation with Edward, but otherwise is absent so far. He seems a little immature, but otherwise likeable. We’ll see how his character progresses, but I don’t think he’ll turn evil anytime soon.

The story is kinda tragic. Bella and Edward have one night together, but Edward breaks it off, and in the process breaks Bella’s heart. Bella moves to Florida with her mom for two years, but after a few unpleasant run ins with Phil, she decides to drive across the country to visit Charlie for a while. Within 20 miles of Forks, her tire blows and she accepts a ride from a stranger, then all hell breaks loose ‘cause she can’t hold her bladder. In my mind, I was yelling “STRANGER DANGER” and blowing my whistle, but Bella didn’t listen to me (and when does she ever *sigh*).

Edward broke off his budding relationship with Bella in an attempt to be noble, but it backfires on him when he finds her dying in a crack house three years later. Edward himself is very interesting. I don’t want to give away what the family business is, but let’s just say, it isn’t driving an ice cream truck.

Thursday, April 22, 2010

His Personal Assistant by NorthernLights17

Title: His Personal Assistant

Author: NorthernLights17

Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4992721/1/His_Personal_Assistant

Summary: Bella Swan, personal assistant to handsome, rich, successful Edward Cullen, decides to take her friends advice and make her oblivious boss fall in love with her. AU/AH.

Rating: M

Readability/Grammar – 9
Humor – 8
Fluffiness/Angst – 4
Fur-friendly (Jake love scale) – 5
Emo-sensitive (Edward love scale) – 10
Smut – 8

Is this story complete? Yes

Did the reviewer finish reading the story? Yes

*SPOILERS FOLLOW*

This story is adorable. Minus a couple corny Let’s-actually-discuss-a-silly-plan-to-seduce-and/or-get-back-at-someone incidences or slight over-discussion of feelings at the end, it was quite good. I think the over-discussion was due to the fact that she had multiple POVs, which is easy to do unless you’re super careful about it. Even in real life we tend to over-analyze things, and if we actually knew each others’ thoughts, we would be over-discussing our feelings, too. Did that make any sense? I hope it did.

The readability was only a minor setback. I would have been able to read it much quicker if she had a beta who focused on small details, but for the most part it was fine.

The only thing wrong with Jake in this story (considering that he’s barely in it) is overestimating his and Bella’s relationship, and doesn’t get the hint when she had told him she only wanted to be friends, or when she’s basically molesting Edward in a restaurant, right in front of him. He’s only 20 (Bella’s age—they grew up together), so he’s still young and naïve, so we’ll forgive him for that.

Read it. Enjoy it. Invest in a ShamWow! *wide grin*

Sunday, April 18, 2010

Through Your Eyes by Megsly

Title: Through Your Eyes

Author: Megsly

Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4674531/1/Through_Your_Eyes

Summary: Bella is completely blind, but has a very unique method of getting around her disability. Upon moving to Forks she realizes that she's not the only student in Forks High with a secret.

Rating: T

Readability/Grammar – 6
Humor – 4
Fluffiness/Angst – 4
Fur-friendly (Jake love scale) – 3
Emo-sensitive (Edward love scale) – 9
Smut – n/a
Sensuality – n/a

Is this story complete? Yes

Did the reviewer finish reading the story? No. (Stopped at chapter 19)

*SPOILERS FOLLOW*

Jake lovers: The Quileutes/wolf pack are obnoxious.

The progression of my emotions for this fic was:
“Oh my goodness, that’s really corny.”
“This is actually kinda good.”
“Man, I’m so glad Cora wanted me to read this!”
“Hmm… She’s kinda giving Alice a lot of control. Something I’m not a fan of.”
“Wow, Carlisle wouldn’t be that rude.”
“The wolves are really irritating.”
“This is getting really repetitive.”
“Where did this infatuation come from?”
“That has no purpose—why is it even necessary?”
“This is silly.”
“I don’t want to read anymore.”

There you have it. Since it’s completed I might finish it one day, but the fact that she treats the wolves completely unsympathetically really gets to me. She also falls into a typical blunder that a lot of authors do, and that’s making Alice a primary conductor of everything that happens. Yes, she may do that to a degree in SM’s world, but the fact that it’s a central topic of discussion bothers me.

She also trades-off POVs a lot, which is distracting, especially when it’s from a POV that you’re not familiar with.

I gave it a relatively low Readability/Grammar rating because she runs a lot of paragraphs together, misuses common homophones (e.g. your/you're, to/too, etc.), and has quotes from different characters in the same paragraph. Big no-nos of writing when you're trying to be concise.

Apparently this story is relatively popular. But I think with better editing and a little more promise of Quileute redemption, she would have a lot more readers.

Tuesday, April 13, 2010

The Cocky and the Cougar by ikss

Title: The Cocky and the Cougar

Author: ikss

Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5438095/1/The_Cocky_and_The_Cougar

Summary: Credit and Sales - often at war in Corporate America. When Con-Vert's new, young Director of Sales Edward Masen met 38 year-old Director of Credit Bella Swan, it was almost inevitible that sparks would fly. AH...RATED MA - ADULTS ONLY, PLEASE

Rating: M

Readability – 9 (just a little wordy sometimes)
Grammar - 10
Humor - 7
Fluffiness/Angst - 5
Fur-friendly (Jake love scale) – 2
Emo-sensitive (Edward love scale) – 8
Smut – 7

Is this story complete? No

Did the reviewer finish reading the story? Yes (Up to chapter 23)

*spoilers follow*

Jacob fans… *sigh*… as of this second, I have a gut feeling that “2” rating will drop down to a one, or even zero. He’s an attractive American Literature professor and Bella met him as a graduate student (he’s ten years her senior). They separated three years ago when she found him with one of his current grad students, and they are now in the middle of divorcing because said grad student is now pregnant. We don’t know if he’s cheated on her before then, but it’s possible. It’s entirely from Bella’s perspective, so we only know what she knows. I’m pretty sure the reason they weren’t divorced already was because they just didn’t want to hassle with the paperwork (silly, I know).

On that note, I didn’t think I’d enjoy this fic, but it’s actually really good. Bella’s a little too emotionally wishy-washy for me, especially in later chapters, but I’m hoping all ends well. The plot’s fairly obvious, so I’ll just let you get to it. ;)

Monday, April 12, 2010

The Exchange Student by Lady Gwynedd

Title: The Exchange Student

Author: Lady Gwynedd

Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5784845/1/The_Exchange_Student

Summary: He's simply an exchange student looking for a decent cup of tea and Bella provides it. She thinks he's completely perfect. When he finds himself in a jam, she offers to help him out; however, they are both soon way over their heads.Will true love prevail?

Rating: T

Readability - 10
Grammar - 10
Humor - 3
Fluffiness/Angst - 1
Fur-friendly (Jake love scale) – N/A
Emo-sensitive (Edward love scale) – 10
Smut – n/a
Sensuality - 7

Is this story complete? Yes

Did the reviewer finish reading the story? Yes

*Spoilers follow*

The fluffiest of fluff, but in a very good way. If you’re in the mood for a flawless Edward, this is your story. It’s basically the premise of the movie, Green Card, only E and B are college students (if you’re too young to know what the movie Green Card was about, just ignore that reference and keep it moving).

Jake isn’t in the one so there’s no need to worry about how he’s portrayed. In fact, it’s so fluffy that the only people you might dislike are Esme (I know, I couldn’t believe it either) and the INS agents (just ‘cause they get a little too personal).

Basically, if you need the warm and fuzzies with no angst to worry your pretty little head over, this is the story to read. :)

Saturday, April 10, 2010

The Daily Grind by letmesign

Title: The Daily Grind

Author: letmesign

Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5037150/1/The_Daily_Grind

Summary: Coffee-addict Bella pines for her regular customer, but finds herself unable to throw a whole sentence together around him. Attempted comedy, sarcasm, TV/Movie references, some sweetness. Short story. M for eventual resolving of UST i.e. lemons/sexytimez.

Rating: M

Readability - 10
Grammar - 10
Humor - 10
Fluffiness/Angst - 3
Fur-friendly (Jake love scale) – n/a
Emo-sensitive (Edward love scale) – 10
Smut – 8


Is this story complete? Yes (minus more possible epilogues)

Did the reviewer finish reading the story? Yes

Cute story. I thoroughly enjoyed it. It has a different take on Rosalie and Emmett's relationship, which is refreshing. No need for spoilers here. Even JxB fans will like this one.

Wednesday, April 7, 2010

Bad Press by HappyWanderer

Title: Bad Press

Author: HappyWanderer

Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5417343/1/Bad_Press

Summary: With the heirs to his hotel completely out of control, Carlisle hires PR pro Bella Swan to do damage control. Will she be able to tame the infamous playboy Edward Cullen? AH, OOC ExB. Rated M for language and lemons.

Rating: M

Readability - 10
Grammar - 10
Humor - 10
Fluffiness/Angst - 4
Fur-friendly (Jake love scale) – 10, he’s gay, and hysterical.
Emo-sensitive (Edward love scale) – 10
Smut – n/a (so far)
Sensuality - 10

Is this story complete? no

Did the reviewer finish reading the story? Yes (up to most recent update, ch 13)

*spoilers follow*

Poor Cora asked me to read and review this story for her because Jake is gay and it’s making her sad.

Well, good for me she asked me to read it, because it’s absolutely hysterical. My dear twi-roommate was making fun of me* last night for laughing so hard at some of the lines.

So far it’s typical, fluffy, and awesome. Edward and Bella meet, and it’s inevitable that they are—the very next day—placed in an awkward work situation. At first I thought this was going to be a tame version of The Office, but it’s not. It actually does have its own elements to it, and I’m waiting with baited breath for her next update.

*Amendment : She apparently wasn't making fun of me, she just didn't want me to choke. Right.

Thursday, April 1, 2010

Canon by Sidekick55

Title: Canon

Author: Sidekick55

Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4581658/1/Canon

Summary: The problem with living forever is...your secrets do too. This is probably the most peripheral Twilight fanfic ever. Give it a try, you might like it anyhow. Yes, the Cullens are in it

Rating: T

Readability - 10
Grammar - 10
Humor - 9
Fluffiness/Angst - 5
Fur-friendly (Jake love scale) – 10, but he’s not a major player
Emo-sensitive (Edward love scale) – 10
Smut – n/a
Sensuality - 8

Is this story complete? Yes

Did the reviewer finish reading the story? Yes

*Spoilers follow*

This is one of the first fanfics I ever read and it’s still in my top five. It takes place after Breaking Dawn and follows the story of a completely new character, Ethan Powell. Ethan’s parent’s divorce and he is forced to move to Forks with his mother. With Cullens as classmates, hilarity and insanity are bound to ensue.
Edward is pretty cannon. I don’t have any complaints of him –hell, he even made me laugh a time or two.

Ethan’s antics are hilarious and not to be missed. When reading, it’s easy to pretend that this is just the next book in the series (or a super long epilogue, lol). Plus, its fun to see all of the “original” Forks High’s descendants and everyone should discover the wonders of cemetery tag.

Oh! Don't forget to check out the epic playlist! The link is in Sidekick's profile.

Disappear Here by h32mh32m

Title: Disappear Here

Author: h32mh32m

Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5558114/1/

Summary: Swimming with the sharks is just part of the high school experience, but navigating the social relationships at an elite prep school, Bella finds that getting on Rosalie's bad side is like adding chum to the water. AH OOC ExB eventually, M for sex, drugs.

Rating: M

Readability - 10
Grammar - 10
Humor - 9
Fluffiness/Angst - 6
Fur-friendly (Jake love scale) – n/a updated: 1 as of chapter 23
Emo-sensitive (Edward love scale) – 8
Smut – 7

Is this story complete? No

Did the reviewer finish reading the story? Up to the latest update (Chapter 14 at the time of review)

*Spoilers follow*
Disappear Here is another story that caught me by surprise in the first chapter and has had me hooked ever since. Bella gets dumped, painfully, but not by whom you’re thinking hehe, and tries to mend her broken heart while also defending herself from the evil heifers at her school.

Jake’s not in this story, as of yet. Edward is okay. He has moments where you can see that he cares for Bella, but so far, he mostly just broods. Jasper is the salve for Bella’s broken heart at the moment and I love him. He’s a sweetie! Alice is in this fic too as Bella’s best bud, but they don’t attend the same school. Can’t wait to see how that plays out.

Emmett is hilarious and makes my day pretty much every time he speaks.

This fic has a Cruel Intentions vibe. The kids are rich and jaded, but each character has redeeming qualities. They drink and do drugs, which makes me a little sad, but otherwise, I love this fic long time.

Update
: Team Jake fans, be prepared. Though Jake isn't a main character in the story he is mentioned in chapter 23 and it isn't exactly pleasant.

Becoming Bella Swan by BellaFlan

Title: Becoming Bella Swan

Author: BellaFlan

Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5452501/1/Becoming_Bella_Swan

Summary: INDIE TWIFIC AWARD WINNER! Bella Swan is being hospitalized for an Identity Disorder...Or is Bella Flanagan being hospitalized? Set after Edward leaves in New Moon or I'm writing this from an asylum. WARNING MA only. VERY DARK COMEDY.

Rating: M

Readability - 10
Grammar - 10
Humor - 10!
Fluffiness/Angst - 6
Fur-friendly (Jake love scale) – 9
Emo-sensitive (Edward love scale) – 8
Smut – 8

Is this story complete? No

Did the reviewer finish reading the story? Up to the latest update (Chapter 33 at the time of review)

*Spoilers follow*

This is one of the funniest stories I’ve read. Bella Flanagan is my new shero! (That means she-hero, for those of you not in the know)
Instead of just getting depressed after Edward leaves her in the woods, it appears that Bella Swan suffers a psychotic break and develops a split personality named Isabella Flanagan. Isabella Flanagan is snarky, horny and without a filter (can’t you see why I love her now?)

Edward is pretty cannon-like. He visits Bella in the hospital and is okay for the most part. The only reason I gave him an 8 is ‘cause he told Bella goodbye for a second time and hurt her again after she’d already been so broken she was in a mental institution. I mean, damn, Eddie, really?

Jake is also pretty much like cannon. He’s sweet to a fault and pretty much does whatever Bella asks of him(either Bella, though Bella Flanagan’s requests are so much more fun. Hehehe). Best part for me? Jake’s dick is bigger! BWAHAHAHA!!!

Don’t fret, Edward lovers. This is an ExB story and, though Bella Flanagan has sexy times with both boys, she will end up with Edward. Jake imprints (and not on Nessie :) ) so there’s no need for Jake fans to fret either. Both boys will be happy in the end.