The Family Business by SuzsPetals

Title: The Family Business

Author: SuzsPetals

Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5722140/1/The_Family_Business

Summary: Edward Cullen met the girl of his dreams but pushed her away due to his complicated, dangerous family life. When cruel irony reunites them, he’s forced to make a devastating choice: Save her from a fate worse than death or from the family business. AU

Rating: M

Readability - 10
Grammar - 10
Humor - 5
Fluffiness/Angst - 5
Fur-friendly (Jake love scale) – N/A so far
Emo-sensitive (Edward love scale) – 10
Smut – N/A so far
Sensuality - 3

Is this story complete? Yes

Did the reviewer finish reading the story? Up to the latest update (chapter 12 at time of review)

*Spoilers follow*

Jake is mentioned and has a brief phone conversation with Edward, but otherwise is absent so far. He seems a little immature, but otherwise likeable. We’ll see how his character progresses, but I don’t think he’ll turn evil anytime soon.

The story is kinda tragic. Bella and Edward have one night together, but Edward breaks it off, and in the process breaks Bella’s heart. Bella moves to Florida with her mom for two years, but after a few unpleasant run ins with Phil, she decides to drive across the country to visit Charlie for a while. Within 20 miles of Forks, her tire blows and she accepts a ride from a stranger, then all hell breaks loose ‘cause she can’t hold her bladder. In my mind, I was yelling “STRANGER DANGER” and blowing my whistle, but Bella didn’t listen to me (and when does she ever *sigh*).

Edward broke off his budding relationship with Bella in an attempt to be noble, but it backfires on him when he finds her dying in a crack house three years later. Edward himself is very interesting. I don’t want to give away what the family business is, but let’s just say, it isn’t driving an ice cream truck.