Bare by stella luna sky

Title: Bare

Author: stella luna sky

Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5115281/1/Bare

Summary: A beautifully plain girl writes the colors used to unravel a young prodigy of the brushstroke. What color are the eyes that see through the heart? Forest green and their rooted brown.

Rating: M

Readability/Grammar – 9 (see note below)
Humor – 2
Fluffiness/Angst – 8
Fur-friendly (Jake love scale) – n/a (he’s in it, but barely)
Emo-sensitive (Edward love scale) – 8
Smut – 4

Is this story complete? Yes

Did the reviewer finish reading the story? Yes

*SPOILERS FOLLOW (but not too bad)*

This story is about two people who are insecure in very different ways. It touches on a lot of different subjects, and is super angsty. You read it and feel like you’re going through the beginning of a relationship—you know how you feel but are afraid of it, for fear it will just get up and pathetically walk away, leaving you with a gaping hole.

I’m still recovering and am going to jump into a fluffy nonsense story to fully heal, so I’ll just get to what I needed to say about the readability.

The only issue I had, I’m sure was the fault of FF.net. They have successfully removed most scene dividers, only leaving a standard paragraph break (I am having to go through my entire fic and re-upload it so it actually makes sense again without them). So when you’re reading a scene in one paragraph and then it jumps to something else completely, it throws you for a loop. Just keep that in mind, and you’ll be fine.