Bella and the Billionaire by nashstheory

Title: Bella and the Billionaire

Author: nashstheory

Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4932148/1/Bella_and_the_Billionaire

Summary: Edward Cullen is a reclusive computer prodigy who needs a personal assistant and Bella Swan is a single mother that needs a job. What happens when these two are brought together and can they both find what they need in their lives?

Rating: M

Readability/Grammar – 9
Humor – 8
Fluffiness/Angst – 5
Fur-friendly (Jake love scale) – 0
Emo-sensitive (Edward love scale) – 10
Smut – 7

Is this story complete? Yes

Did the reviewer finish reading the story? Yes

Jake fans—there is absolutely no love for you here. Although I tend to separate Jacob from any negative characters authors put him in, so it’s not too bad if you can just completely distance yourself from the name. This character doesn't resemble Jacob in the slightest with personality or actions, so it's pretty easy.

*SPOILERS FOLLOW*

This story was so flip-floppy with emotions, I seriously thought I would get whiplash. But in a good way. It was highly fluffy, in the sense that Edward and Bella’s relationship only had flaws in the sense that they didn’t see how much one cared for the other. On the other end of the spectrum, it was highly angsty, considering that Bella’s entire family was out to get her. The story comes out (although not graphic other than describing after-effects) that Phil raped Bella as a teenager, and Renée convinced herself that Bella seduced him, and sent him off to live with Charlie. Charlie is a controlling and emotionally abusive father who would love nothing more to see Bella marry a controlling and emotionally abusive Jake. The only real neutral character that’s present is Billy, who—I believe I read at one point—actually sided with Bella. Once Charlie and Jake coerced someone to issue a marriage license without Bella’s presence—or even signature—they got married and lived together at UW. Bella becomes pregnant with Jake’s son, Charlie, and this whole time both he and Charlie Sr. are convinced that Bella is under substance abuse, which is why she’s being so difficult in the marriage.

In any case… now that I’ve completely ruined the plotline for you, you should totally go read it! Hahaha. No, I’m just kidding… that’s just the back story, and it’s not exactly a secret.

Bare by stella luna sky

Title: Bare

Author: stella luna sky

Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5115281/1/Bare

Summary: A beautifully plain girl writes the colors used to unravel a young prodigy of the brushstroke. What color are the eyes that see through the heart? Forest green and their rooted brown.

Rating: M

Readability/Grammar – 9 (see note below)
Humor – 2
Fluffiness/Angst – 8
Fur-friendly (Jake love scale) – n/a (he’s in it, but barely)
Emo-sensitive (Edward love scale) – 8
Smut – 4

Is this story complete? Yes

Did the reviewer finish reading the story? Yes

*SPOILERS FOLLOW (but not too bad)*

This story is about two people who are insecure in very different ways. It touches on a lot of different subjects, and is super angsty. You read it and feel like you’re going through the beginning of a relationship—you know how you feel but are afraid of it, for fear it will just get up and pathetically walk away, leaving you with a gaping hole.

I’m still recovering and am going to jump into a fluffy nonsense story to fully heal, so I’ll just get to what I needed to say about the readability.

The only issue I had, I’m sure was the fault of FF.net. They have successfully removed most scene dividers, only leaving a standard paragraph break (I am having to go through my entire fic and re-upload it so it actually makes sense again without them). So when you’re reading a scene in one paragraph and then it jumps to something else completely, it throws you for a loop. Just keep that in mind, and you’ll be fine.