Title: Master of the Universe
Author: Snowqueens Icedragon
Link: http://www.twilighted.net/viewstory.php?sid=8511
Summary: Bella Swan is drafted in to interview the reclusive, enigmatic Edward Cullen, multi-millionaire CEO of his company. It's an encounter that will change her life irrevocably, leading her to the darkest realms of desire. Adult themes, AH AU, Bella and Edward.
Rating: MA (M version available on ff.net: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5368782/1/Master_of_the_Universe)
Readability/Grammar – 9
Humor – 5
Fluffiness/Angst – 9
Fur-friendly (Jake love scale) – 5
Emo-sensitive (Edward love scale) – 10
Smut – 10
Is this story complete? No
Did the reviewer finish reading the story? Yes (Up to ch. 82, latest update)
*major spoilers follow*
Woah.
Totally not what I was expecting. Truly, I was expecting something along the lines of The Submissive and The Dominant (I haven’t finished The Dominant yet), but it’s not even close.
A brief glimpse into my ratings:
-The grammar and readability in this fic isn’t perfect, but it’s not as distracting once you get into the story. I have a very specific way of writing, myself, so I’m slightly biased when it comes to technique and how that plays into readability.
-This story is not comedic, in any form of the word, but I found myself cracking up a certain lines, or how Bella and Edward interact, either with themselves, or with others (that comment should make sense if you read it).
-This story has a tiny bit of the fluffy in it, but it's primarily angst. It's strange, because when I actually went to go rate this section, I was thinking, Wow, it really is ALL angst, isn't it? I think the difference here, is that even when times are stressful, it's hopeful. I never once got the feeling (well, with 82 chapters already written, I guess I didn't have much to worry about) that issues were going to be left as they were. Something that helps is that, from the very beginning, Edward is relatively open about how much he wants Bella, and because it's entirely from Bella's perspective, you know how much she is helpless against her desire for him.
-As far as Jake fans are concerned, Jake is mildly irritating. Like in a lot of other fics where he’s a hindrance to Edward and Bella’s relationship, he’s a good guy, just misguided. In the beginning of the fic he and Bella are both drunk and he tries to kiss her. Bella has already drunk dialed Edward moments before this, who flips out and is already on his way, just in time to get rid of Jake (*whew* No involuntary kisses here! Of course not!). Jake is a photographer who we see, when his gallery opens one night, has been taking candid of Bella shots (not distasteful, just unexpected), that are blown up to gigantic proportions. It’s obvious that he’s in love with her. Bella has told him multiple times—and it’s getting annoying—that she’s with Edward, it’s serious, and she’s not interested in him as more than a friend. Still, she’d rather ignore the fact that he’s dense and letting her lead him on, than cut him off because of it.
-Edward is always the protagonist here. Even when he's being a total DID/psycho/control freak/crazy person, you know it's only because it's completely smitten with Bella, and can't imagine his life without her in it. This is an issue that's raised later, so no worries. Bella doesn't take it lying down (haha, pun TOTALLY intended), and makes the point that she understands his love for her, but doesn't give him the right to put her in a guilded cage.
-Smut. *sigh.* Well, as you can most likely guess from the title, the content centers around the BDSM lifestyle. That being said, there are actually minimal scenes where this lifestyle is acted upon. Anyone who has serious issues with that can go for the edited version available on ff.net.
All of this being said, I am really enjoying this fic and the way the characters are developing.
And now, my anticlimactic sign-off.
Laters, Baby!
Tuesday, April 27, 2010
Sunday, April 25, 2010
The Family Business by SuzsPetals
Title: The Family Business
Author: SuzsPetals
Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5722140/1/The_Family_Business
Summary: Edward Cullen met the girl of his dreams but pushed her away due to his complicated, dangerous family life. When cruel irony reunites them, he’s forced to make a devastating choice: Save her from a fate worse than death or from the family business. AU
Rating: M
Readability - 10
Grammar - 10
Humor - 5
Fluffiness/Angst - 5
Fur-friendly (Jake love scale) – N/A so far
Emo-sensitive (Edward love scale) – 10
Smut – N/A so far
Sensuality - 3
Is this story complete? Yes
Did the reviewer finish reading the story? Up to the latest update (chapter 12 at time of review)
*Spoilers follow*
Jake is mentioned and has a brief phone conversation with Edward, but otherwise is absent so far. He seems a little immature, but otherwise likeable. We’ll see how his character progresses, but I don’t think he’ll turn evil anytime soon.
The story is kinda tragic. Bella and Edward have one night together, but Edward breaks it off, and in the process breaks Bella’s heart. Bella moves to Florida with her mom for two years, but after a few unpleasant run ins with Phil, she decides to drive across the country to visit Charlie for a while. Within 20 miles of Forks, her tire blows and she accepts a ride from a stranger, then all hell breaks loose ‘cause she can’t hold her bladder. In my mind, I was yelling “STRANGER DANGER” and blowing my whistle, but Bella didn’t listen to me (and when does she ever *sigh*).
Edward broke off his budding relationship with Bella in an attempt to be noble, but it backfires on him when he finds her dying in a crack house three years later. Edward himself is very interesting. I don’t want to give away what the family business is, but let’s just say, it isn’t driving an ice cream truck.
Author: SuzsPetals
Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5722140/1/The_Family_Business
Summary: Edward Cullen met the girl of his dreams but pushed her away due to his complicated, dangerous family life. When cruel irony reunites them, he’s forced to make a devastating choice: Save her from a fate worse than death or from the family business. AU
Rating: M
Readability - 10
Grammar - 10
Humor - 5
Fluffiness/Angst - 5
Fur-friendly (Jake love scale) – N/A so far
Emo-sensitive (Edward love scale) – 10
Smut – N/A so far
Sensuality - 3
Is this story complete? Yes
Did the reviewer finish reading the story? Up to the latest update (chapter 12 at time of review)
*Spoilers follow*
Jake is mentioned and has a brief phone conversation with Edward, but otherwise is absent so far. He seems a little immature, but otherwise likeable. We’ll see how his character progresses, but I don’t think he’ll turn evil anytime soon.
The story is kinda tragic. Bella and Edward have one night together, but Edward breaks it off, and in the process breaks Bella’s heart. Bella moves to Florida with her mom for two years, but after a few unpleasant run ins with Phil, she decides to drive across the country to visit Charlie for a while. Within 20 miles of Forks, her tire blows and she accepts a ride from a stranger, then all hell breaks loose ‘cause she can’t hold her bladder. In my mind, I was yelling “STRANGER DANGER” and blowing my whistle, but Bella didn’t listen to me (and when does she ever *sigh*).
Edward broke off his budding relationship with Bella in an attempt to be noble, but it backfires on him when he finds her dying in a crack house three years later. Edward himself is very interesting. I don’t want to give away what the family business is, but let’s just say, it isn’t driving an ice cream truck.
Thursday, April 22, 2010
His Personal Assistant by NorthernLights17
Title: His Personal Assistant
Author: NorthernLights17
Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4992721/1/His_Personal_Assistant
Summary: Bella Swan, personal assistant to handsome, rich, successful Edward Cullen, decides to take her friends advice and make her oblivious boss fall in love with her. AU/AH.
Rating: M
Readability/Grammar – 9
Humor – 8
Fluffiness/Angst – 4
Fur-friendly (Jake love scale) – 5
Emo-sensitive (Edward love scale) – 10
Smut – 8
Is this story complete? Yes
Did the reviewer finish reading the story? Yes
*SPOILERS FOLLOW*
This story is adorable. Minus a couple corny Let’s-actually-discuss-a-silly-plan-to-seduce-and/or-get-back-at-someone incidences or slight over-discussion of feelings at the end, it was quite good. I think the over-discussion was due to the fact that she had multiple POVs, which is easy to do unless you’re super careful about it. Even in real life we tend to over-analyze things, and if we actually knew each others’ thoughts, we would be over-discussing our feelings, too. Did that make any sense? I hope it did.
The readability was only a minor setback. I would have been able to read it much quicker if she had a beta who focused on small details, but for the most part it was fine.
The only thing wrong with Jake in this story (considering that he’s barely in it) is overestimating his and Bella’s relationship, and doesn’t get the hint when she had told him she only wanted to be friends, or when she’s basically molesting Edward in a restaurant, right in front of him. He’s only 20 (Bella’s age—they grew up together), so he’s still young and naïve, so we’ll forgive him for that.
Read it. Enjoy it. Invest in a ShamWow! *wide grin*
Author: NorthernLights17
Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4992721/1/His_Personal_Assistant
Summary: Bella Swan, personal assistant to handsome, rich, successful Edward Cullen, decides to take her friends advice and make her oblivious boss fall in love with her. AU/AH.
Rating: M
Readability/Grammar – 9
Humor – 8
Fluffiness/Angst – 4
Fur-friendly (Jake love scale) – 5
Emo-sensitive (Edward love scale) – 10
Smut – 8
Is this story complete? Yes
Did the reviewer finish reading the story? Yes
*SPOILERS FOLLOW*
This story is adorable. Minus a couple corny Let’s-actually-discuss-a-silly-plan-to-seduce-and/or-get-back-at-someone incidences or slight over-discussion of feelings at the end, it was quite good. I think the over-discussion was due to the fact that she had multiple POVs, which is easy to do unless you’re super careful about it. Even in real life we tend to over-analyze things, and if we actually knew each others’ thoughts, we would be over-discussing our feelings, too. Did that make any sense? I hope it did.
The readability was only a minor setback. I would have been able to read it much quicker if she had a beta who focused on small details, but for the most part it was fine.
The only thing wrong with Jake in this story (considering that he’s barely in it) is overestimating his and Bella’s relationship, and doesn’t get the hint when she had told him she only wanted to be friends, or when she’s basically molesting Edward in a restaurant, right in front of him. He’s only 20 (Bella’s age—they grew up together), so he’s still young and naïve, so we’ll forgive him for that.
Read it. Enjoy it. Invest in a ShamWow! *wide grin*
Sunday, April 18, 2010
Through Your Eyes by Megsly
Title: Through Your Eyes
Author: Megsly
Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4674531/1/Through_Your_Eyes
Summary: Bella is completely blind, but has a very unique method of getting around her disability. Upon moving to Forks she realizes that she's not the only student in Forks High with a secret.
Rating: T
Readability/Grammar – 6
Humor – 4
Fluffiness/Angst – 4
Fur-friendly (Jake love scale) – 3
Emo-sensitive (Edward love scale) – 9
Smut – n/a
Sensuality – n/a
Is this story complete? Yes
Did the reviewer finish reading the story? No. (Stopped at chapter 19)
*SPOILERS FOLLOW*
Jake lovers: The Quileutes/wolf pack are obnoxious.
The progression of my emotions for this fic was:
“Oh my goodness, that’s really corny.”
“This is actually kinda good.”
“Man, I’m so glad Cora wanted me to read this!”
“Hmm… She’s kinda giving Alice a lot of control. Something I’m not a fan of.”
“Wow, Carlisle wouldn’t be that rude.”
“The wolves are really irritating.”
“This is getting really repetitive.”
“Where did this infatuation come from?”
“That has no purpose—why is it even necessary?”
“This is silly.”
“I don’t want to read anymore.”
There you have it. Since it’s completed I might finish it one day, but the fact that she treats the wolves completely unsympathetically really gets to me. She also falls into a typical blunder that a lot of authors do, and that’s making Alice a primary conductor of everything that happens. Yes, she may do that to a degree in SM’s world, but the fact that it’s a central topic of discussion bothers me.
She also trades-off POVs a lot, which is distracting, especially when it’s from a POV that you’re not familiar with.
I gave it a relatively low Readability/Grammar rating because she runs a lot of paragraphs together, misuses common homophones (e.g. your/you're, to/too, etc.), and has quotes from different characters in the same paragraph. Big no-nos of writing when you're trying to be concise.
Apparently this story is relatively popular. But I think with better editing and a little more promise of Quileute redemption, she would have a lot more readers.
Author: Megsly
Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4674531/1/Through_Your_Eyes
Summary: Bella is completely blind, but has a very unique method of getting around her disability. Upon moving to Forks she realizes that she's not the only student in Forks High with a secret.
Rating: T
Readability/Grammar – 6
Humor – 4
Fluffiness/Angst – 4
Fur-friendly (Jake love scale) – 3
Emo-sensitive (Edward love scale) – 9
Smut – n/a
Sensuality – n/a
Is this story complete? Yes
Did the reviewer finish reading the story? No. (Stopped at chapter 19)
*SPOILERS FOLLOW*
Jake lovers: The Quileutes/wolf pack are obnoxious.
The progression of my emotions for this fic was:
“Oh my goodness, that’s really corny.”
“This is actually kinda good.”
“Man, I’m so glad Cora wanted me to read this!”
“Hmm… She’s kinda giving Alice a lot of control. Something I’m not a fan of.”
“Wow, Carlisle wouldn’t be that rude.”
“The wolves are really irritating.”
“This is getting really repetitive.”
“Where did this infatuation come from?”
“That has no purpose—why is it even necessary?”
“This is silly.”
“I don’t want to read anymore.”
There you have it. Since it’s completed I might finish it one day, but the fact that she treats the wolves completely unsympathetically really gets to me. She also falls into a typical blunder that a lot of authors do, and that’s making Alice a primary conductor of everything that happens. Yes, she may do that to a degree in SM’s world, but the fact that it’s a central topic of discussion bothers me.
She also trades-off POVs a lot, which is distracting, especially when it’s from a POV that you’re not familiar with.
I gave it a relatively low Readability/Grammar rating because she runs a lot of paragraphs together, misuses common homophones (e.g. your/you're, to/too, etc.), and has quotes from different characters in the same paragraph. Big no-nos of writing when you're trying to be concise.
Apparently this story is relatively popular. But I think with better editing and a little more promise of Quileute redemption, she would have a lot more readers.
Tuesday, April 13, 2010
The Cocky and the Cougar by ikss
Title: The Cocky and the Cougar
Author: ikss
Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5438095/1/The_Cocky_and_The_Cougar
Summary: Credit and Sales - often at war in Corporate America. When Con-Vert's new, young Director of Sales Edward Masen met 38 year-old Director of Credit Bella Swan, it was almost inevitible that sparks would fly. AH...RATED MA - ADULTS ONLY, PLEASE
Rating: M
Readability – 9 (just a little wordy sometimes)
Grammar - 10
Humor - 7
Fluffiness/Angst - 5
Fur-friendly (Jake love scale) – 2
Emo-sensitive (Edward love scale) – 8
Smut – 7
Is this story complete? No
Did the reviewer finish reading the story? Yes (Up to chapter 23)
*spoilers follow*
Jacob fans… *sigh*… as of this second, I have a gut feeling that “2” rating will drop down to a one, or even zero. He’s an attractive American Literature professor and Bella met him as a graduate student (he’s ten years her senior). They separated three years ago when she found him with one of his current grad students, and they are now in the middle of divorcing because said grad student is now pregnant. We don’t know if he’s cheated on her before then, but it’s possible. It’s entirely from Bella’s perspective, so we only know what she knows. I’m pretty sure the reason they weren’t divorced already was because they just didn’t want to hassle with the paperwork (silly, I know).
On that note, I didn’t think I’d enjoy this fic, but it’s actually really good. Bella’s a little too emotionally wishy-washy for me, especially in later chapters, but I’m hoping all ends well. The plot’s fairly obvious, so I’ll just let you get to it. ;)
Author: ikss
Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5438095/1/The_Cocky_and_The_Cougar
Summary: Credit and Sales - often at war in Corporate America. When Con-Vert's new, young Director of Sales Edward Masen met 38 year-old Director of Credit Bella Swan, it was almost inevitible that sparks would fly. AH...RATED MA - ADULTS ONLY, PLEASE
Rating: M
Readability – 9 (just a little wordy sometimes)
Grammar - 10
Humor - 7
Fluffiness/Angst - 5
Fur-friendly (Jake love scale) – 2
Emo-sensitive (Edward love scale) – 8
Smut – 7
Is this story complete? No
Did the reviewer finish reading the story? Yes (Up to chapter 23)
*spoilers follow*
Jacob fans… *sigh*… as of this second, I have a gut feeling that “2” rating will drop down to a one, or even zero. He’s an attractive American Literature professor and Bella met him as a graduate student (he’s ten years her senior). They separated three years ago when she found him with one of his current grad students, and they are now in the middle of divorcing because said grad student is now pregnant. We don’t know if he’s cheated on her before then, but it’s possible. It’s entirely from Bella’s perspective, so we only know what she knows. I’m pretty sure the reason they weren’t divorced already was because they just didn’t want to hassle with the paperwork (silly, I know).
On that note, I didn’t think I’d enjoy this fic, but it’s actually really good. Bella’s a little too emotionally wishy-washy for me, especially in later chapters, but I’m hoping all ends well. The plot’s fairly obvious, so I’ll just let you get to it. ;)
Monday, April 12, 2010
The Exchange Student by Lady Gwynedd
Title: The Exchange Student
Author: Lady Gwynedd
Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5784845/1/The_Exchange_Student
Summary: He's simply an exchange student looking for a decent cup of tea and Bella provides it. She thinks he's completely perfect. When he finds himself in a jam, she offers to help him out; however, they are both soon way over their heads.Will true love prevail?
Rating: T
Readability - 10
Grammar - 10
Humor - 3
Fluffiness/Angst - 1
Fur-friendly (Jake love scale) – N/A
Emo-sensitive (Edward love scale) – 10
Smut – n/a
Sensuality - 7
Is this story complete? Yes
Did the reviewer finish reading the story? Yes
*Spoilers follow*
The fluffiest of fluff, but in a very good way. If you’re in the mood for a flawless Edward, this is your story. It’s basically the premise of the movie, Green Card, only E and B are college students (if you’re too young to know what the movie Green Card was about, just ignore that reference and keep it moving).
Jake isn’t in the one so there’s no need to worry about how he’s portrayed. In fact, it’s so fluffy that the only people you might dislike are Esme (I know, I couldn’t believe it either) and the INS agents (just ‘cause they get a little too personal).
Basically, if you need the warm and fuzzies with no angst to worry your pretty little head over, this is the story to read. :)
Author: Lady Gwynedd
Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5784845/1/The_Exchange_Student
Summary: He's simply an exchange student looking for a decent cup of tea and Bella provides it. She thinks he's completely perfect. When he finds himself in a jam, she offers to help him out; however, they are both soon way over their heads.Will true love prevail?
Rating: T
Readability - 10
Grammar - 10
Humor - 3
Fluffiness/Angst - 1
Fur-friendly (Jake love scale) – N/A
Emo-sensitive (Edward love scale) – 10
Smut – n/a
Sensuality - 7
Is this story complete? Yes
Did the reviewer finish reading the story? Yes
*Spoilers follow*
The fluffiest of fluff, but in a very good way. If you’re in the mood for a flawless Edward, this is your story. It’s basically the premise of the movie, Green Card, only E and B are college students (if you’re too young to know what the movie Green Card was about, just ignore that reference and keep it moving).
Jake isn’t in the one so there’s no need to worry about how he’s portrayed. In fact, it’s so fluffy that the only people you might dislike are Esme (I know, I couldn’t believe it either) and the INS agents (just ‘cause they get a little too personal).
Basically, if you need the warm and fuzzies with no angst to worry your pretty little head over, this is the story to read. :)
Saturday, April 10, 2010
The Daily Grind by letmesign
Title: The Daily Grind
Author: letmesign
Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5037150/1/The_Daily_Grind
Summary: Coffee-addict Bella pines for her regular customer, but finds herself unable to throw a whole sentence together around him. Attempted comedy, sarcasm, TV/Movie references, some sweetness. Short story. M for eventual resolving of UST i.e. lemons/sexytimez.
Rating: M
Readability - 10
Grammar - 10
Humor - 10
Fluffiness/Angst - 3
Fur-friendly (Jake love scale) – n/a
Emo-sensitive (Edward love scale) – 10
Smut – 8
Is this story complete? Yes (minus more possible epilogues)
Did the reviewer finish reading the story? Yes
Cute story. I thoroughly enjoyed it. It has a different take on Rosalie and Emmett's relationship, which is refreshing. No need for spoilers here. Even JxB fans will like this one.
Author: letmesign
Link: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5037150/1/The_Daily_Grind
Summary: Coffee-addict Bella pines for her regular customer, but finds herself unable to throw a whole sentence together around him. Attempted comedy, sarcasm, TV/Movie references, some sweetness. Short story. M for eventual resolving of UST i.e. lemons/sexytimez.
Rating: M
Readability - 10
Grammar - 10
Humor - 10
Fluffiness/Angst - 3
Fur-friendly (Jake love scale) – n/a
Emo-sensitive (Edward love scale) – 10
Smut – 8
Is this story complete? Yes (minus more possible epilogues)
Did the reviewer finish reading the story? Yes
Cute story. I thoroughly enjoyed it. It has a different take on Rosalie and Emmett's relationship, which is refreshing. No need for spoilers here. Even JxB fans will like this one.
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